Hello, my dear classmates!
Welcome to leave your valuable feedback here. You can talk about anything about our proposal presentation today. Every piece of your feedback will help me improve better. Thank you for your support and caring!:-)
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Now I will try to evaluate my presentation this time. :-)
Before the presentation:
* strength: I try to present my slide in a more logic way. Only one slide is used to make my key points stand out. I practise several times before the class. So I get a clear mind of my presentation. Besides, we discussed with each other in our meetings before the class, and Elin & Sheila really help me a lot! :-) With their help, I find my key points and good way to deliver them.
* weakness: Lack of accurate and excellent expressions in my presentation. I just keep using common expressions in oral English and keep repeating some of them, which may make it a little boring.
During the presentation:
* strength: By clear explaination and repeating, key points stand out in my presentation. Good eye contact with the audience. Besides, I am confident with what I am delivering, because of enough preparation for this project. Some gesture can be found in my presentation to make it more proactive.
* weakness: some sentences appeared again and again, which made it a little boring. Besides, my points aren't clear enough due to my pronunciation.
At last, thanks for my two teamates' great help. It is their helping me that makes this not-so-bad presentation. I really enjoy our discussion a lot, really a lot of fun.
And thanks again for your valuable advice.
:-)
Brooks~
Hi Brooks!
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Okie let's first focus on your good points =D
1) You project your voice very well. It was loud and clear.
2) You maintained a confident posture and had good eye contact with the audiences.
3) You memorised the slides well and presented well without glancing at the slides to recall what you want to say.
4) You were confident when answering the questions.
Now the negatives...
1) You had little gestures when presenting your ideas.
2) You maintained one tone and or pitch through out your speech. Could have paused or use a different tone of voice or pitch to emphasis certain points.
3) There was some confusion during the Q&A session. Should have wait for other party to finish their speech before chipping in.
=D overall it was a good effort! We all can improve together! =DD
I actually had roughly the similar points as Edmund.
ReplyDelete- Loud and clear articulation
- Confident posture, good eye contact
- But a little monotone
Just want to add that the video wasn't quite audible. I think it's because of the background noise. And I think it's Techno Edge, not the Deck. Hehe.
Finally, congratulations on finishing the oral presentation!
Congratulation!! :D
ReplyDeleteFirstly, I do agree with Edmund and Yong Feng that you have a good projection of voice, confidence, and eye contact. However,I believe that the underlying reason that you were being monotone was not because of your mistake. Instead, you have been used to speak with this tone since you first learning English. On my point of view, you have really done a good job.
On the other hand, you could have more gestures like Sheila to distract people from noticing your monotone voice so much.
Good luck Brooks! :D
Brooks!
ReplyDeleteGOOD job! you did well! and you managed to pull through with a single slide. that was amazing! haha.
And let me point out that you have improved tremendously. I can see that you have put enormous effort into this, both proposal and presentation. Thank you Brooks, for always being our anchor (especially when Elin and I begin to digress, which actually happen most of the time. haha.)
overall, thank you! =)
Hi Brooks and Team!
ReplyDeleteAll 3 of you have put in so much effort into this presentation and it really showed. Great job presenting your work :)
However, the content of the presentation itself seemed just a little bit off-focus to me. Your main goal should have been to convince the NUSEU to execute your plan.(Not to repeat your proposal...do you agree with me?)
Perhaps you could have included information more on the benefits of your proposal and the necessity to put it into action, rather than the methodology and how you came up with the idea, etc.
But overall, I must say your team was quite impressive. None of you looked nervous at all! And did your best to answer all the tricky questions the audience asked. :)
Hi Brooks,
ReplyDeleteYou projected your voice well during the presentation and you had good gestures too. You conveyed your messages to your audience in a slow and steady way.
However, as Pavi mentioned, I think your team talked too much about methodology and the work you did instead of selling your proposal to the audience (or NUSSC). I believe that this presentation would be more convincing if you add on more benefits and solutions.
Thanks for your good efforts!
Hi Brooks,
ReplyDeleteOverall your team's presentation was excellent, and the topic was very helpful:)
for the personal part, i think your voice was high, which showed your confidence. gesture was OK(maybe not a lot, but still fine). as for other things, like smile or tone, i think you have your own way to present, and i can not say they're not good. of course, if you want to be more impressive, like Brad, you may want to try to smile more, have various tones or even make jokes, and so on, during your presentation. ( i am also learning such skills...)
Hi Edmund!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your suggestion!:-)
As for the shortcomings, it is really the case. During my English speech, I am always lack of open gestures and various tones.
Because of unfamiliar with English speeching, I always pay more attention to what I am going to say, instead of how I should say using various tones. Then, If I read some articles, I can read in various tones and know where to pause. So I should have practiced more to be totally familiar with what I am trying to express.
As for your third suggestion, I didn't pay much attention to this point, even I forgot it. Yeah, I should be more calm and be patient to listen.
Thank you, Edmund! Hope your good performance this Tuesday.
:-)
Brooks
Hi Yongfeng!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your good advice. :-)
Actually, We found the bad quality of our video once after we recorded it. However, it is nearly impossible to ensure good quality in such a noisy circumstance. At last, we dicide to use the subtitle to help audience understand the content.
It happened in Edge, not in Deck. You are really careful. :-) Actually, I noticed this only before our presentation in class. But I can't revise any more in the video because there is no time left. :-)
Thank you, Yongfeng! Believe your good performance this Tuesday.
:-)
Brooks
Hi Minhao!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your consideration!
Yeah, I am used to address my speech in monotone without any reference. I think this may reduce my pressure. So I need practice, to speak more.:-)
As for the lack of gestures, I think this relates to my personality. Actually, I am not a so out-going person. In my life, I seldom use open gesture, but I want to use more open gestures to be more proactive.
See you around!
:-)
Brooks~
Hi Sheila!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your great effort in our project!
It is realy great of fun to work with you in a group. I have really learned a lot,not only about English, but also different life style in a different culture.
It is YUANFEN that we three are in a same group!
:-)
Brooks~
Hi Pavi!
ReplyDeleteI agree with you. We should have put more stress on the benefits of our solutions to make it more convincing.
What I think at first is like this: the reason why the methodology is so long is that we are trying to find out the problems through this part. To make NUSEU and NUSCC convinced in their problems, we spend quite a lot of time addressing the result in the methodology part. Then the benefit is that these problems can be solved using our solutions.
So it is like this:
1. You have problems( Using lots of time to convince them)
2. Our solutions can solve this problems.(this is the benefits)
I think this is a little like what happens in hospital: doctor tells you are ill, and my medicine can help you reduce your illness. So you should take my medicine.
Thank you for your good advice! I learned a new thinking stytle.
:-)
Brooks~
Hi Cosine!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your suggestion!
I agree with you that we should put more stress on the benefits and solutions.
Actually, I have prepared a little more content. Due to the time limit, I just cut off some of them. More contents about the benefits should be contained in our presentation.
Thank you for your addvice~
:-)
See you around!
Brooks~
Hi Senlin!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your good and kind suggestions.
I find you are really skilled in conveying your opinions in a more flexiable way which is much easier for us to accept.
I also want to learn such skills that I can express myself more effectively. What I want to learn is to be calm and talktive(or multi-tones) in my presentation. I also want jokes in my presentation, however I think it is a little difficult for me at present.
We can make effort to improve ourselves together!
See you around!
:-)
Brooks~
You've goten lots of great feedback for your reflection. Thanks, Brooks!
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